长安老耿
发表于 2014-8-14 09:33:58
*老耿为你点评：时评的谋篇布局
本帖最后由 长安老耿 于 2014-9-24 10:54 编辑 <br /><br /><div style="text-align: center;"><span style="font-size: x-large; background-color: white; ">老耿为你点评：时评的谋篇布局</span></div><span style="background-color: white;"><br></span><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> 欢迎同学们。刚才，我们探讨了两个问题：配图诗与时评、时评的审题与构思。现在，我们探讨第三个问题：时评的谋篇布局 。</font></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;">请同学们，看《刺刀见红才是真批评》这篇文章，大家一边看，一边听我点评。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 不知道同学们是否还记得，我在7.25讲《怎样写时评》的时候，曾经介绍过“起承转合”的理论。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 我再就《刺刀见红才是真批评》这篇文章的结构，运用“起承转合”的理论，做一个简要分析。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 这篇评论，共六个自然段。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 开篇第一段，是破题，也是“起”。破的是什么“题”呢？标题说的是“刺刀见红才是真批评”，于是，作者开门见山，直奔主题。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 请看第一段：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 批评与自我批评是我们党不断改造自己、提升自己的有力武器。这一武器若用得好，锋利如刺刀，于同志，可挑出毛病、改正缺点、帮助提升；于集体，可化解矛盾、消除隔阂、增进团结。各级党组织正是在不断的磨砺中增强凝聚力战斗力。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> “……锋利如刺刀”，便是破“题”。紧接着，用了“于同志”、“于集体”这两句，分别说明“真批评”的两个作用。“各级党组织正是在不断的磨砺中增强凝聚力战斗力”，是对真批评的作用之总结，既不重复，又是提升。这就叫“起”，起，就是文章起头，开篇。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 如果说，第一段是从正面论述起头开篇，说明“刺刀见红”这个“真批评”的作用的话，那么，第二段，便是从反面说明“假批评”的表现及危害，进行“承”接。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 请看文章第二段：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 然而，这一利器并不能始终保持锋利如初。有时握得不紧，还未上阵，先弱了声势，不堪一用；有时聚焦不准，看似拼命，却不能直击问题，效果不好；有时轻描淡写，用力不够，银样蜡刺头，立不了功。当前，教育实践活动民主生活会、组织生活会相继召开的关键环节，要达到预期效果，必须把武器磨尖擦利，以刺刀见红的真批评解决思想作风和工作中的顽症痼疾，回应群众的真切期盼。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 作者用了三个以“有时”打头的排比句：“有时握得不紧，还未上阵，先弱了声势，不堪一用；有时聚焦不准，看似拼命，却不能直击问题，效果不好；有时轻描淡写，用力不够，银样蜡刺头，立不了功”，这三句话，一句紧接一句，干脆有力，尖锐泼辣。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 紧接着，作者从正面指出：“当前，教育实践活动民主生活会、组织生活会相继召开的关键环节，要达到预期效果，必须把武器磨尖擦利，以刺刀见红的真批评解决思想作风和工作中的顽症痼疾，回应群众的真切期盼”。针对“假批评”，作者旗帜鲜明的亮出了自己的观点，同时，是又一次“破”题。文章开篇，作者第一次破题，是在表层。至此，作者的第二次破题，则是透过表层，深入核心。也是对第一次破题的深化，又是照应。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 读到这里，读者就可能随着作者的思路深入思考：那么，怎样才能“把武器磨尖擦利，以刺刀见红的真批评解决思想作风和工作中的顽症痼疾，回应群众的真切期盼”呢？</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 这在文章结构上就叫做“转”，“转”入作者要论述的核心问题。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 文章的第三、四、五等自然段，作者从三个方面，具体论述了三个论据。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 第三自然段，“刺刀见红，心中要勇”。什么叫“勇”？作者指出，“勇”，就是“直面矛盾、正视问题”。同时进一步说明“勇不等于蛮，勇要有诚和善作辅助”，之后对“诚”和“善”作了论述。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 第三段的原文是：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 刺刀见红，心中要勇。每个组织和部门都存在一定的矛盾和问题，直面矛盾、正视问题，用心用力研究解决，才能及时消除误会、化解隔阂、增进团结。勇不等于蛮，勇要有诚和善作辅助。开展批评要出于公心，秉持正义，不发泄私愤、不捕风捉影，诚心诚意沟通思想，推心置腹交换意见，非但不会伤害同志，反而会增进理解和信任。开展批评也要与人为善，“良言一句三冬暖，恶语伤人六月寒”。批评者先天占有了有利位置，若咄咄逼人、得理不饶人，即使讲得是对的，也很难让人接受。唯有立足善的出发点，让被批评的同志感到他人指出自己的问题，目的是为了完善自我、促进工作，是为了自己今后不出错误和问题，心中羁绊自然少了，同志情谊自然深了，春风化雨效果自然显现。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> 第四自然段，论述了“刺刀见红，靶心要准”。第五自然段，论述了“刺刀见红，用力要狠”。这里，我就不具体分析了。请同学们看四、五两段的原文：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 刺刀见红，靶心要准。开展批评与自我批评，完全是为了解决矛盾、克服缺点、更正错误。毛泽东说：“说话要有证据，批评要注意政治。”刺刀在手，面对的是同志身上的缺点和错误，刺准了可以解决问题、化解误会，刺不准伤害的是同志感情，破坏的是党内团结。凡事不问青红皂白，霹头盖脑张口就说，不会让人心服口服。要勇谋结合，打鼓打到点子上、批评点到穴位上。切忌主观臆断、胡乱猜说，真正聚焦问题有的放矢，既不夸大也不缩小，当面指出而不背后议论。唯有如此，才能避免相互猜忌、互不信任、疑神疑鬼，才能让被批评者心悦诚服，达到预期效果。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 刺刀见红，用力要狠。如果放下顾虑、瞄准靶心，最后发力时轻描淡写、隔靴搔痒，也只能是认认真真走了个过场，扎扎实实搞了个形式。不要信奉那套明哲保身的处世哲学，不要戴着面具玩“好人主义”，有问题就要找出来，有刺要挑出来。只有深处用力，真正点到麻穴、吃到痛，方能有醍醐灌顶，幡然醒悟的自觉；只有以汤熨治腠理之疾，以针石疗肌肤之病，以火齐施于肠胃之患，才不至于病入骨髓“无奈何”，才能起到治病救人作用。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 至此，作者用“心中要勇”、“靶心要准”、“用力要狠”，说明了什么叫“刺刀见红”。这三个论据，支撑起了“刺刀见红才是真批评”这个中心论点。整个论过过程，有力而周全。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 现在，我们看文章的结尾：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 武器越用越利。千万不能把我们防身治病的武器给丢掉了。要将教育实践活动的成果不断深化，本着对自己、对同志、对班子、对党高度负责的精神，大胆使用、经常使用这个有效武器，在刺刀见红中解决问题，在坦诚相见中形成团结，切实增强组织的战斗力凝聚力。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 结尾，在文章结构上，就叫“合”。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 什么叫“合”？大家都看过孔雀开屏吧。男孔雀的羽毛很漂亮，它总爱在女孔雀面前展开翅膀显摆。后来，经过训练，学会了在游客面前，在镜头面前显摆。显摆完了，它的翅膀就收起来了。这一收，就叫“合”，恢复了表演前的状态。文章写作也一样，没有什么神秘的。世间万物，一道统之。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 朋友们，从我刚才的点评中，不知道大家有什么心得没有？如果有，请与大家分享。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 现在，我把自己的几点心得，分享给朋友们。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 我的心得，就是我在8.6给作者的回复里。我念给大家听听。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;">归零笔杆：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 读了你的小评论《刺刀见红才是真批评》，和你8.1的回信。谈几点看法，与你商讨。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 当初，打开你的这篇文章，仅仅是通篇浏览了一下，就被它吸引住了，于是再读，三读。应该说，无论是从文章的审题立意、论据材料的选择、论证和结构安排来说，还是从文字表达来说，这都是一篇较好的评论文章。尤其是得知你“以前没写过时评类文章”，第一次写评论就能达到这样的水平，应该说，起点是比较高的。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 我觉得有以下几点，值得总结一下。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 一、审题立意，注意划分“关键词”。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 这是一篇“命题”作文。命题作文的题目，有的是仅仅划定一个话题或题材范围，如《也谈批评与自我批评》。作者可以在话题或题材范围内，自由确定论点。也就是说，由出题者“命题”，作者“立意”。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 有的则是题目本身就明确了论点，作者必须找出这个论点，而后围绕这个论点，去选择论据，结构文章。我出的《刺刀见红才是真批评》这个题目，就属于后者。出题者既“命题”，又在题目中“立意”。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 后者，在审题上，就难一些。它要求作者必须领会“命题”者的意图。在审题上，我很赞赏你采取的把题目分为几个关键词的方法。题目划分为几个关键词后，命题者的“立意”就显现出来了，因比，这是一个简便、实用的“破题”方法。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 在《刺刀见红才是真批评》这个题目里，我之所以强调“真”、“真批评”，是因为在当下的民主生活会、组织生活会中，弄虚作“假”的“假”批评，大量存在。在这一点上，你很好的理解了我的意图。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 二、谋篇布局，善于学习借鉴，消化吸收。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> “题”已“破”，接下来便是选择论据、结构文章了。结构文章，就是用论据论证观点。这一点，你的回信已经介绍了。我赞赏的是，你在选择论据、结构文章的过程中，善于学习借鉴，消化吸收。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;">我注意到，你在回信中说，“参考了刘云山《关于批评和自我批评的几点认识》）”，“借用了《扁鹊见蔡桓公》几句话”。(说老实话，刘云山的这篇文章，我之前没有看过。你提到了，我才上网读了读。你还记得我7.31的信吗？应该说，我出题的初衷，是暗合了刘云山的观点的。《扁鹊见蔡桓公》倒不陌生。)</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 我为什么赞赏你善于学习借鉴，消化吸收呢？</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p>
**** Hidden Message *****<p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 之二，再看看文章的开头和结尾。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 开头：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 批评与自我批评是我们党不断改造自己、提升自己的有力武器。这一武器若用得好，锋利如刺刀，于同志，可挑出毛病、改正缺点、帮助提升；于集体，可化解矛盾、消除隔阂、增进团结。各级党组织正是在不断的磨砺中增强凝聚力战斗力。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 结尾：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 武器越用越利。千万不能把我们防身治病的武器给丢掉了。要将教育实践活动的成果不断深化，本着对自己、对同志、对班子、对党高度负责的精神，大胆使用、经常使用这个有效武器，在刺刀见红中解决问题，在坦诚相见中形成团结，切实增强组织的战斗力凝聚力。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 开头你写道“各级党组织正是在不断的磨砺中增强凝聚力战斗力。”，结尾依然是“切实增强组织的战斗力凝聚力”。我知道，你这是在“照应”，这没有错。但是，两次用了“战斗力”“凝聚力”，似嫌重复，能否换个词、或者换个说法呢。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 不足之三，文中用了“腠理”一词，这是医学名词，意为皮肤、肌肉的纹理。一般人可能不懂，如果用括号加个解释，就好了。虽然，这看起来是小事，但是，我们写文章是给广大读者看的。作者应该有为时刻读者着想，为读者服务的意识，却是一件大事。</font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 罗里罗嗦了这么多，不知妥否，仅供参考。</font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 又，明天晚上我值班，拟点评你这篇文章。你意如何？</font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; 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border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 昨天下午临下班前，我收到了作者的回信，我们一起来看一看。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr></font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;">耿老师：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 一篇小评论，得老师三复，治学之严谨，育人之不倦，学生为之感动。再致敬意！</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 作为一篇评论，自己感到确实有不到位的。然而，对于何处不足，思路并不清晰，学习老师关于时评的“一、二、三”，又有对学生拙作的“三复”，渐有越捋越顺之感。上次作业，动手构思到最终呈交老师，其间也作反复修改，更深化了“觉知此事须躬行”的理解。短短千言，要写出思想、写出观点、写出感觉、写出文采，的确不是简单拼拼凑凑所能应付过关的。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 自此，也更加关注时评类短文，在自己做的简报本中，将人民日报、新华日报、南京日报、文汇报、解放日报等报刊的评论文章都列入重要学习序列。对一些重要新闻，事先自己打个腹稿，（假如我写，怎样切入，写哪几点），然后再将同一新闻的不同报道评论进行浏览，对各种观点进行一个比对，希望能够通过这种方法，使思维更发散，视野更开阔。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 能在公开课得到老师点评，不甚荣幸。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 另，最近持续关注北大燕京学堂事件，待了解全面、深入分析后再发表一点自己的看法，还望继续得老师点拨指正。</font></p><p align="left" style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;">致敬</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; 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border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><span style="background-color: white;"> <wbr></span></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 同学们，时间过得真快。今晚，老耿为你点评，就以今天上午，我给作者的回信作为尾声吧。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; 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line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 先谢谢你的鼓励。不说作为老师，仅作为老同志，传帮带，为青年朋友的成长搭把手出点力也是应该的。何况，教学相长，在与你的交流中，我也获益不少。我一贯主张，老同志向年轻人学习，就是“与时俱进”。青年，总是时代的先行者。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 读罢回函，感受有三：</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 其一，知不足，是成长进步的前提。青年如此，中老年亦如此。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; font-size: 22px; background-color: white;"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 其二，记录文章修改初稿、屡次修改稿至定稿，既是总结，也是提高。养成习惯，一篇胜数篇。</font></p><p style="margin-bottom: 5px; border: 0px; list-style: none; word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 20.869565963745117px; color: rgb(73, 73, 73); font-family: 'Microsoft YaHei', 'Helvetica Neue', SimSun; "><font style="word-wrap: normal; word-break: normal; line-height: 32.173912048339844px; font-family: 楷体_GB2312, 楷体; 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老猫
发表于 2014-8-14 10:21:14
鱼渔兼授，教学相长。千金易得，良师难寻。点赞。
xxkgmq
发表于 2014-8-14 10:49:10
越看越觉得精彩，想多看，多学习，以增长自己
萝卜白菜
发表于 2014-8-18 13:27:44
发自内心的感觉精彩，这是我一个初级小秘远远不能达到的顶端啊，写文章真是博大精深的一门学问啊，很精彩，非常好。认认真真的学习三遍，畅快
oujide
发表于 2014-8-18 14:41:34
很厉害！谢谢提供学习的机会！
江苏秦
发表于 2014-8-19 08:47:39
好好滴学习时评写作。
小谢
发表于 2014-8-19 09:01:24
起承转合，一正二反三正。
beijiguang
发表于 2014-8-19 10:08:23
点评得非常到位，是一篇很好的文章。
魑魅魍魉
发表于 2014-8-19 11:59:25
非常精彩的点评，认真学习了。。
激浊扬清
发表于 2014-8-20 14:48:47
写的很好，好像看完整的文章，谢谢作者，谢谢系统，么么哒~~